Mais vous avez presque tout réécrit !
Le texte initial n'étant pas si mal à mon avis, je tente quelques ajustements essentiellement grammaticaux :
Looking for the burning stars in the night (attention : to look for = chercher / to watch = observer)
She remembers their first gaze here
But he left her for a new world, far, there, there
She knew his soul was waiting for her
Among those stars shining in the sky
refrain
And she cries, cries
and she cries, and she cries
And she cries, cries
and she cries, and she cries
She whispers under the silvery light
Please Mother Moon she said, please...
Make him remember the time we spent together
Make him love me as I miss him today
Make him wait for me in your everlasting heaven
refrain
Will I cry, cry
Will I cry, will I cry
Will I cry, I wonder
La fin est un peu cynique !...
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